SayPro Progress Tracking Template: Feedback Given
Participant Name:
[Enter Participant Name Here]
Essay Title:
[Enter Essay Title Here]
Submission Date:
[Enter Submission Date Here]
Feedback Given
The Feedback Given section is an essential part of the SayPro Progress Tracking Template. It ensures that each participant receives constructive and actionable insights regarding their essay at various stages of the writing process. This section helps track the feedback provided by instructors or peers and guides the participant in making necessary improvements.
1. Initial Feedback on First Draft (if applicable):
- Date of Feedback:
[Enter Date Here]
- Feedback Summary:
[Provide a summary of the feedback given on the first draft. Highlight major strengths, weaknesses, and areas for improvement.] Example:
“The introduction is clear, but the thesis could be more specific. You have good ideas in the body paragraphs, but several arguments are underdeveloped. Consider expanding on the ethical implications of AI in education.”
- Specific Comments:
- Grammar: [Note any specific grammatical issues, such as sentence structure, punctuation, etc.]
- Structure: [Discuss the organization of the essay, including paragraph flow and transitions.]
- Content: [Evaluate the depth of the argument, evidence provided, and clarity of the ideas.]
2. Feedback on Revised Draft (if applicable):
- Date of Feedback:
[Enter Date Here]
- Feedback Summary:
[Provide a summary of feedback given on the revised draft. Mention what changes have improved the essay and what areas still need work.] Example:
“The revised introduction is stronger, and the thesis is clearer. However, some of your arguments are still lacking concrete examples. The conclusion should summarize your key points more effectively.”
- Specific Comments:
- Grammar: [Any improvements made, or remaining issues.]
- Structure: [How well the essay now flows between sections.]
- Content: [How well the content aligns with the thesis and if it supports the argument sufficiently.]
3. Final Feedback on Completed Essay (if applicable):
- Date of Feedback:
[Enter Date Here]
- Feedback Summary:
[Provide a final assessment of the essay’s quality, including major strengths and areas for improvement. This should be a comprehensive overview of the work after revisions.] Example:
“Your final draft is well-organized and persuasive, with clear arguments and adequate evidence. However, there are some minor grammar issues, especially in sentence construction. Additionally, some references could be integrated more smoothly into the text.”
- Specific Comments:
- Grammar: [Highlight any final grammatical errors or style improvements.]
- Structure: [How well the overall structure and organization contribute to clarity and flow.]
- Content: [Assess the strength and relevance of the arguments, evidence, and conclusions.]
4. Additional Comments for Future Improvement:
- Suggestions for Improvement:
[Provide any suggestions for future essays or projects, especially regarding writing style, research techniques, or critical thinking.] Example:
“In your future essays, try to include more diverse sources to provide a broader perspective on your topic. Focus on integrating quotes smoothly into your argument rather than presenting them as isolated pieces of evidence.”
5. Action Steps for Revision:
- What Needs to Be Revised: [List any specific elements of the essay that need further revision. Be clear about what should be addressed in the next draft.] Example:
- “Improve transitions between the second and third body paragraphs.”
- “Clarify the definition of ‘artificial intelligence’ in the introduction.”
- Expected Outcomes: [Describe the expected outcomes from addressing the feedback. What improvements will be made in terms of clarity, argument strength, or writing mechanics?] Example:
“By expanding your argument with more examples and addressing the grammar issues, your essay will become more compelling and academically rigorous.”
6. Instructor’s Final Comments:
- Instructor’s Evaluation:
[Provide an overall evaluation, summarizing the participant’s progress, strengths, and areas that still need work.] Example:
“This essay has shown significant improvement from the initial draft. Your analysis of AI in education is well thought out, but the integration of examples needs to be more cohesive. You are on the right track, but the next step is to refine your writing style and ensure that all arguments are fully supported with evidence.”
Instructor Signature:
[Instructor Name]
[Instructor Position]
[Date]
Purpose of Feedback:
The Feedback Given section helps to document the feedback provided throughout the writing process. By summarizing feedback for each draft stage (initial, revised, final), both participants and instructors can track improvements, identify recurring issues, and ensure that each essay is progressing toward meeting the required academic standards.
This structured approach ensures that participants receive clear, actionable feedback that supports continuous improvement, ultimately helping them refine their writing and achieve their academic goals.
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